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I've decided to do an international storybook about different places around the world that pertain to my family. in my introduction post, I talked about how I have adopted brothers and sisters. I hope to have a story from Texas, as this is my home state, as well as an Asian story, and a Russian folklore story. I really enjoyed the Asian stories that I read, so I may include one or two of those, and a one Texas and one Russian story. The main idea of my StoryBook will be an around the world story. Most likely, the stories will begin in an Asian story, travel to Russia, Texas, and then maybe back to Asia. I look forward to researching more about the history and the stories.
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Tuesday, February 6, 2018
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Hi Julianna! This is such a cool storybook concept! I think the way you've linked the project to your personal life is fascinating and will really help you connect with the reader. What a great way to pay tribute to where you came from! I wonder, beyond home countries, are you going to tie the stories back to you or your siblings in any way, with name changes or something like that? If you did, it could add another layer of personalization to the storybook. As for the site itself, I think the cover photo creates a really nice vibe, and I love your title! I did also want to make you aware of a typo on your homepage that spellcheck didn't catch - you have "hear" instead of "heart." Overall, I'm looking forwards to seeing what stories you choose for this project!
ReplyDeleteHi Julianna! I both love traveling and I also love reading and listening to stories of people who have traveled around the world. I think that it is so cool that your family is from all over the world. Your family is so unique in that four of you are adopted. I really liked how you had not only a banner image but an image in your introduction story as well. I was wowed with how many different images you used for all of your different stories. I liked that you planned out your other stories, that will make it easier for you to write later. While I do like your banner images, what if you used a different banner image for each of your Texas stories? You might want to stick with your theme of maps for each of the different locations but it might be fun to explore doing something different for both of them since you have two.
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ReplyDeleteI LOVE traveling! I like how you start off your introduction with a question! It really draws the audience in right from the start. You have a more unique perspective on the world and traveling. Even though you may never have visited the country you were adopted from, that's still such a cool and unique part of your history. I like how you're making this project personal. Because you have such a unique family, it's nice how you want to represent a piece of them. I also like how you're making the audience the "travelers", what a cool concept! I think you may have included how each story will be represented in the introduction. Will the stories be from your families personal experiences? Or maybe they're your creative take on their experiences? However, I think this is a very cool concept for your project and think you have many opportunities to let your creativity shine through! Nice job!
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ReplyDeleteI think that this is a really neat idea. I like how you are taking your own background and experiences to create your storybook.
Your homepage is nice, although I did have a brief moment of confusion with the link. It might be helpful to move the line saying that it is a link to your comment wall up above the link itself, or change the text to include "Comment Wall" somehow.
As for the introduction, I like the intro. It sounds a little tour guide-like, which fits your theme pretty well in my opinion. The two "maybe" lines in the first paragraph sound a little repetitive; I'm not sure if it's intentional or not, but if it is, I think you might be able to change your wording a bit to make them have a bit more symmetry between them. A lot of intentional repetition I've seen has a certain rhythm in the repeated lines.
The background behind why you chose this idea is great, and it lets us relate and connect with the stories that you're going to give us. A unique storybook inspired by a unique family sounds really interesting, and I can't wait to see what stories you have for us!
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ReplyDeleteI love your site name and photo! I love traveling, so your storybook really intrigued me from the start. I like how you're using personal experiences to tie into your stories - these are sure to be personalized and probably much more easy to write. Good job on your intro - I felt like I knew where your tone of voice was leading me throughout the traveling. I also like how you're speaking to other adventurers. A fun idea could be to transition from each story with a new type of transpiration! Also, will you include your own personal experiences from each destination into your stories, or tell them from scratch? You might find it easier to include your own, although no one would know they're yours unless you told us on the author's note! This sounds like it'll be a really fun, first person project for you to work on. Can't wait to read more of your traveling stories!
ReplyDeleteUh Hey JJ! I really like you site and the title “Finding your Place in New Places” because I will be graduating in May and moving to a new place so I am going to have find my place. It definitely caught my attention and made me click on it. I am going to enjoy you storybook because I love traveling and look forward to traveling more as my life goes on. I like how you have the places you want to talk about already laid out in the website and how they are all about places people in your family were born. I can already tell it is going to be very interesting. I would love to travel to China because there are so many places to visit while you get there. I also like how each banner for the place is a map of the city with the county lines and highways and rivers.
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ReplyDeleteI was instantly drew to your storybook because of the title - I think it was a short, creative way to summarize exactly what your stories were going to be about and draw readers in, like me, who love to travel! I really like the overall set-up of your storybook. I have one main recommendation for you that you may want to think about - I really like the map theme throughout the different stories. But I was wondering if you would want to add a unique photo as the headliner photo to draw us in to each part of the world. For example, maybe for China, you pick a photo that you would really associated with your hometown or China in general. It is just a thought, but it may draw more readers in!
As far as your introduction, I think it looks great! I like how you explained why you chose to do the storybook that you did. I only have one question. Are you basing the stories of you and your siblings off of actual stories that we have read, or are you simply writing stories through personal experiences? I think it would work great either way.
Hey there JJ. I really like the way you've made your portfolio. It was cool to see the pages there for the stories you haven't added yet. It was like a cool foreshadowing of things to come. I'm looking forward to getting to read what you have to say about those other places too! As far as the Texas story goes, I really like the amount of detail you put in to the whole story. The imagery really helped me connect to what was going on in it. That being said, in the first sentence of the fourth paragraph, I think the do is unnecessary. I'm not sure about it, but it makes the sentence read a little strange. Other than that I really enjoyed the story. Keep up the good work.
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ReplyDeleteWhat an incredibly interesting introduction! I was immediately drawn to reading more and I hope to keep up with this site! The title of the home page, the headings of each tab, the images, and most importantly, your story itself, contributes to a very unique portfolio.
In terms of feedforward, I think the spacing of your paragraphs in the introduction could reflect a different place. For example, you could write one paragraph focused on Russia, then China, and Texas, so on. With this, the paragraphs can highlight the uniqueness of each of the stories of your family members. Other than that, I think your portfolio is up to a great start! I hope you continue using your creative writing skills to draw readers in. I definitely hope to be back to read more! Good luck.
Hey JJ! I like the layout and picture you used in your project. The title is comforting. I am not sure how to explain that in another way. It is almost like finding the best place to study at a new college. It feels like home. After reading your introduction, I can tell that this is exactly what you meant to do with your storybook project. I am very impressed by the heart behind your project and the ability to capture that just in a title. Your stories come from a place of love and I must say it is my favorite one so far.
ReplyDeleteHey JJ, I am really impressed with your creativity for your storybook. I really like how you are taking some of your experiences and sharing them with other people. Also while including traveling and sharing different places with others. I feel like your storybook is really coming together. I found myself reading more and more and being really into the introduction and the story that is published already. I think that all of the headers and pictures are very appropriate for the site. Also, I really like how in the introduction you explained the outline of your storybook and why there are tabs with different places written on them. I really like to travel and learn about cultures I am not familiar with so this storybook is right up my ally. Overall, you did a really great job and I am excited to see the final product! Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHowdy JJ,
ReplyDeleteYour storybook is one of the most unique that I've read so far! I love that you chose something so close to home (literally!). I think that the way you set up your first story makes the author's note especially valuable. It almost feels like "Part Two" of your story, in which you frame your own life through the lens of mythology. It's very cool, and ties everything together nicely.
It's more of a personal style thing, but I think it might be worth trying to write about yourself in the third person. That way, your story might feel closer to the original myth you're tying it to. Then again, writing about your family so personally is one of the things that makes your storybook so unique!
Thank you for sharing the first part of what is bound to be a great storybook. So far I greatly enjoy it!
Hi JJ! First off, I think your storybook idea is so special. It is so cool that you are doing stories based off where your siblings were adopted from, and before even reading your stories I know they are going to have a meaningfulness that I haven't seen just because of that. I am going to focus on your China story. First, I like the image a lot. Secondly, I think the writing was pretty clear and concise. I like how you tried to incorporate a story from your childhood with a Chinese folk tale, and I think you did a good job of doing so. Maybe to add a little bit more of the tale, you could add how the parents praised the older sister for finding Lamby and scolded the younger sister for losing her toy or something like that. Just a suggestion. All in all, great job!
ReplyDeleteHey JJ! I really loved doing this assignment this week because it allowed me to read some things from the students in the Myth-Folklore class. This was a great opportunity and I look forward to doing it again soon! Your website was great and I loved all of the information about different places. My favorite post was the Texas post. I am moving to Texas this summer, so your post got me even more excited! I especially loved this post because I was able to learn Jean’s story. This story was really inspiring and it was nice to read. I think it is pretty awesome that you were able to re-tell the story and use inspiration from your grandmother. My grandmother passed away when I was three years old, but something that always makes me remember her are the quilts and blankets that she made for all of us. They really are a great way to stay close to loved ones. Thank you so much for sharing this story!
ReplyDeletehello JJ. I am from the Indian Epics class. I have been enjoying how students from the other class have been approaching their source material. I really liked the theme of your project. I liked the traveling aspect and how you connected it to your own life. I also am a big fan of maps and really enjoyed the images that you used. I also liked how you used images to further connect the project to your own life. I appreciated this attention to the details. Your authors notes did a good job of connecting your stories to life and the importance of this connection. I especially enjoyed your China story. You did a really good job of connecting with the Chinese fairy tale. One thing that I thought could be improved was the details in the stories. the stories were great but i thought they were missing that extra spice.
ReplyDeleteHey Julianna! First of all, i really loved your site. It was simple to navigate and it wasnt hard on the eye. I loved the images you have used in your sites also. It blends in very well with your stories. I loved how you decided to use different countries/cities to base your stories on. I really loved your format and the stories that fit with each states/country was very nice. I am from Indian epics class so some of the stories arent really familiar with me but your author's note broke down the original stories very well enough that i had no problem comparing your version and the originals. Overall, really good job! I hope you keep up the good work and ill look forward to read more stories from you!
ReplyDeleteHey Julianna! I really like your site. I think that the images work well with your premise, I think that it's really cool that it represents your family and has she more sense of connection to you. Your author's notes do a really good job of explaining your take on the story and how it differs from the original. You could have a little more of an intro or a lead off about the location before you jump into the story, just to create a real sense of place within the narrative. I love how maps go throughout your site to tie all the pages together. I think that the family connection really came through. Overall, fantastic job on your project. Great writing, great site layout and design, and great concept.
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